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This is a real Cultural studies personal statement written by a student for their university application. It has been carefully edited into the new three-question format, with all of the original wording kept. It may have strengths and weaknesses, but it can be used as inspiration for writing your own UCAS personal statement. Ensure your personal statement is entirely your own work, copying from this example or other sources is considered plagiarism and can affect your application. There are lots more examples in our collection of sample personal statements.

Why do you want to study this course or subject?

In today’s fast-paced market, [Business Name] stands out as a trusted name, offering high-quality products and exceptional customer service. With a strong commitment to innovation, reliability, and customer satisfaction, [Business Name] continues to set new standards in the [industry type, e.g., fashion / technology / services] sector.

Our journey began with a simple vision: to provide customers with top-notch [products/services] that combine quality, value, and style. Over time, this vision has grown into a successful platform where thousands of satisfied customers find exactly what they need.

How have your qualifications and studies helped you to prepare for this course or subject?

[Business Name] believes in building lasting relationships with customers by delivering excellence at every step. From a user-friendly online experience to prompt delivery and responsive support, every aspect of the business is designed with the customer in mind.

What else have you done to prepare outside of education, and why are these experiences useful?

Whether you are looking for [specific products/services], exploring new trends, or seeking trusted solutions, [Business Name] is your go-to destination. Our dedication to quality, innovation, and trust makes us a reliable partner for individuals and businesses alike.

AI generated feedback

This feedback is AI-generated, based on the text of this personal statement:

This personal statement is more a business description than a student personal statement for university application. For the new UCAS personal statement format, it should focus on personal motivation, academic preparation, and extracurricular experiences related to the chosen course. The current content lacks personal reflection, specific academic or vocational qualifications, and concrete examples of relevant personal achievements or skills. It would benefit from restructuring and rewriting to align with the expectations of a new UCAS personal statement, emphasizing why the applicant wants to study the subject, how their qualifications have prepared them, and what experiences outside education support their readiness for university.

How personal statements have changed?

The current personal statement format, with three 'scaffolding' questions, was introduced by Ucas in September 2025. This personal statement was submitted before then, using the old essay-style format. It has been carefully edited into the three-question format, with all of the original wording kept.

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