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Personal Statement - PCGE Primary Education 2

This is a real Education and teaching personal statement written by a student for their university application. It has been carefully edited into the new three-question format, with all of the original wording kept. It may have strengths and weaknesses, but it can be used as inspiration for writing your own UCAS personal statement. Ensure your personal statement is entirely your own work, copying from this example or other sources is considered plagiarism and can affect your application. There are lots more examples in our collection of sample personal statements.

This statement has been reviewed by one of The Student Room's personal statement reviewers, and their feedback is included below.

Why do you want to study this course or subject?

Having grown up in a house where children have been ever-present I know the challenges that are faced when working with those who are of a primary school age. I have also been able to develop a knowledge of the benefits of working with a group of bright, intuitive children who are beginning their careers in Education. As the son of a parent who has worked as both a childminder and a special needs assistant in a primary school I have been able to experience firsthand the joys of working with young people who have an incredible thirst for knowledge and who are willing to develop their potential to the maximum. Applying for a Primary Education course would allow me to progress into the field of Education and help children of a primary age progress to the best of their ability and develop into well rounded, good people. It has been reported that there are significantly fewer men within the field of primary education and I hope that by applying to study Education and go on to teach at this level I will provide a good male role model for the next generation.

Through my mother I have been able to experience the world of primary education and have had the opportunity to teach ICT on an individual basis to members of a Year 2 class. From this experience it was obvious that each member of the class was individual with regards to their learning styles and their personalities. This experience reinforced my opinion of primary teaching as a career in which it is possible to meet many interesting and individual characters that have brilliant imaginations, unlimited enthusiasm and many excellent ideas about the world around them.

How have your qualifications and studies helped you to prepare for this course or subject?

Throughout my time in school and in sixth form I have been able to participate in many experiences that have been incredibly beneficial to my development as both a person and as a student. One of the experiences I am most proud of is my involvement with our school’s Peer Support Group (PSG). The PSG is a team of five students, each allocated to a form of Year 7s to help them with issues that they face throughout the year. We help many students throughout the year and have helped deliver bulletins on issues such as racism, bullying and homophobia within assemblies and form periods. I have been chosen as one of two people from the Wirral to be invited to a National Cyber Bullying Conference and report back to the Wirral Healthy Schools Committee and delegates from schools across the county. My participation within the PSG has also led to being chosen as a School Prefect, giving me extra duties such as patrolling and delivering speeches in assemblies. Both of these roles have allowed me to obtain skills that would be helpful to me in a teaching role.

I have been heavily involved with the school choir since I moved from primary to secondary education. This has allowed me to develop a greater understanding of what is required to work together as a group in order to achieve a single goal. Throughout my time in the choir I have performed three times a year in school concerts and have attended three musical tours to Austria, Germany and France. During my GCSE years I trained with the school hockey team and had the ability to participate in several games for the school, allowing me to work within a team on the sporting field.

As part of my extracurricular activities I have also participated in the Young Enterprise scheme to further my knowledge of business and have the opportunity to work within a close-knit group. Through a majority vote I was elected as the Managing Director of our company and enjoyed leading our team throughout the year and learning leadership skills that could put me in good stead for a teaching role.

What else have you done to prepare outside of education, and why are these experiences useful?

I believe that the challenge of studying primary education at degree level would be an interesting and incredibly beneficial choice and would allow me to further my enjoyment of providing support and imparting knowledge to those who crave it most.

Expert feedback from The Student Room personal statement reviewer

General Comments: At the moment, this personal statement contains a lot of extra-curricular details that are not related to teaching. While the experience is good, it is important to show that you are prepared for the realities of teaching, as it is a vocational course. The teaching of ICT to Year 2 children is good experience but very different from being a class teacher responsible for 30 children. It's important to show awareness of areas like lesson planning, behaviour management, teaching strategies, and inclusion, which can be gained through observing classes or speaking with teachers.

There is excessive and unnecessary capitalisation throughout, e.g., 'primary education' and 'primary school' should not be capitalised.

The statement lacks a clear concluding paragraph; the final sentences appear to be a conclusion but should be separated and expanded to emphasize why you specifically want to undertake the course and how you are suited to it.

Specific Comments: The opening sentence is weak as living with children is not the same as working with them. Wording such as 'As the son of a parent...' is awkward and too informal. Repetitive phrasing and some clichés, such as 'incredible thirst for knowledge,' should be avoided. You need to clearly explain why you want to be a teacher and what makes you a good candidate.

When discussing your experience teaching ICT to Year 2, focus on what you learned about classroom realities rather than just your opinion. Discuss observations around behaviour, planning, and engagement.

The sections on extracurricular activities like choir and sport could be shortened or linked specifically to transferable skills relevant for teaching, such as teamwork and leadership.

In mentioning the Young Enterprise scheme, clarify how business knowledge relates to your teaching ambitions and specify leadership skills gained.

Overall, focus more on relevant teaching experiences and insights to demonstrate your suitability and genuine commitment to primary education.

AI generated feedback

This feedback is AI-generated, based on the text of this personal statement:

This personal statement presents a strong passion for primary education and highlights meaningful experience gained through family ties and direct involvement teaching young children. The statement effectively includes examples of leadership and teamwork that can be valuable in a school environment.

However, to improve for the 2026 new UCAS personal statement standards, the applicant should sharpen the focus on specific teaching-related experiences and knowledge, such as lesson planning, behaviour management, and inclusion practices. More reflection on how these experiences have prepared them for the realities of teaching would strengthen the statement.

Reducing less relevant extracurricular detail or linking it more clearly to skills relevant to education will improve coherence and impact. The language could be more formal and concise, avoiding clichés and ensuring clarity about personal motivations and qualifications.

Finally, a clearer and more developed conclusion articulating why they are a good candidate and what they hope to achieve on the course would provide a strong finish. These improvements will help better meet the expectations of admission tutors and the new UCAS personal statement format.

How personal statements have changed?

The current personal statement format, with three 'scaffolding' questions, was introduced by Ucas in September 2025. This personal statement was submitted before then, using the old essay-style format. It has been carefully edited into the three-question format, with all of the original wording kept.

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