This is a real Languages personal statement written by a student for their university application to School of Oriental and African Studies (SOAS), Edinburgh, Durham, Manchester and Oxford. It has been carefully edited into the new three-question format, with all of the original wording kept. It may have strengths and weaknesses, but it can be used as inspiration for writing your own UCAS personal statement. Ensure your personal statement is entirely your own work, copying from this example or other sources is considered plagiarism and can affect your application. There are lots more examples in our collection of sample personal statements.
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Perhaps because of my dual British and American heritage, I have wanted to understand and compare different cultures from an early age. During my GCSE years, I became aware that my studies had a primarily Western focus. There was a large part of the world about which I knew little, and I wanted to learn more about their languages, literatures and histories.
My curiosity in China originated from my interest in world religions as a window into understanding how different cultures approach complex questions. I found Confucianism and Daoism particularly interesting, especially since these opposing views had emerged from a single society. This led me to read about Chinese history. I enjoyed Robert Marks's "China: Its Environment and History", as it gave a concise and approachable overview of the vast and changing region that has constituted China over 4000+ years. My investigations culminated in my entry to the Corpus Christi College History Essay Competition, where I addressed the relationship between religion and power in China from 1949 to 1999.
With my interest in China, my love of languages and my desire to gain a richer understanding of the world's cultures, studying Chinese seems like the ideal path for me. Spending a year in China will allow me to immerse myself in contemporary Chinese society and enable me to study Chinese culture more deeply. Although I don't know exactly know what I want to do when I graduate, I believe that being fluent in Chinese will open up opportunities and career paths that excite me and might otherwise be unavailable to me.
I believe language is a key way to understand the opinions and viewpoints of other peoples, especially where nuances of thought get lost in translation. I help teach French to lower years. Explaining grammatical ideas that make sense to me but which younger students find difficult is satisfying; it has also made me a better language learner. This year I am one of two Subject Mentors in French. As well as helping year 12s in class, I will organise activities to enrich appreciation of French culture, for example through films and posting articles on our French A level Facebook group. My love of languages led me to start Ancient Greek GCSE in year 12. This was a fun way to tackle a language with a different script and a complex grammar. Over time it has also allowed me to learn about the ancient world through contemporary writings, which provides a different perspective to secondary sources.
I am really excited about my EPQ, which is about the films of Jia Zhangke and his portrayals and critiques of modernity in China. I really appreciate his realist aesthetic, which conveys an unaffected view of contemporary Chinese life.
I contacted SOAS during my application and changed Chinese (Modern and Classical) to Social Anthropology and Chinese, The Offer changed to AAA and this was the offer I firmed.
Grades Achieved:
I am one of twelve senior students, representing the views of my year group of 250, serving as an ambassador for the school and organizing social and academic events. This has provided an opportunity for me to develop my leadership and team working skills. I also co-run our school's LGBT+ group. This is a support role in which I also engage in activism, for example holding educational assemblies and fostering links between our group and my school's Christian Union.
Outside of school, I took part in the Cambridge University Year 12 Summer School in Archaeology and Biological Anthropology. My project was to determine whether or not a Viking artifact was a chess piece. I found it very interesting to see first hand how physical items can be used to understand pre-modern cultures. I also took part in the Access to Bristol Social Policy course and Bristol University Year 11 Summer School.
I enjoyed taking part in Model United Nations. It gave me an appreciation for international policymaking, understanding the needs and interests of different countries and insight into how these countries interact with each other. In my spare time I participate in a band that performs locally and go to the gym regularly. I am employed by a local charity as a fundraiser.
I contacted SOAS during my application and changed Chinese (Modern and Classical) to Social Anthropology and Chinese, The Offer changed to AAA and this was the offer I firmed.
This feedback is AI-generated, based on the text of this personal statement:
This personal statement effectively demonstrates a strong motivation for studying Chinese by linking cultural curiosity with language skills and relevant academic and extracurricular experiences. The candidate successfully integrates a wide range of activities that showcase leadership, intellectual engagement, and cultural awareness. To improve further, the applicant could enhance clarity by reducing minor repetition and explicitly connecting experiences more tightly to the chosen course to strengthen coherence. Including reflections on how specific skills developed will directly support university study could also add depth. Overall, it aligns well with the expectations for the new UCAS personal statement format from 2026 onwards.
The current personal statement format, with three 'scaffolding' questions, was introduced by Ucas in September 2025. This personal statement was submitted before then, using the old essay-style format. It has been carefully edited into the three-question format, with all of the original wording kept.
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