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During the course of my studies, I have discovered a distinct passion for science, particularly biology and chemistry. This is a passion enhanced by extensive personal study, in addition to my GCSE and A level courses, of a range of texts on subjects such as biochemistry, physiology and pathology. This passion for medical science is a driving force behind my desire to study this course, coupled with the challenge of this route and the desire for a rewarding and worthwhile career.
I have taken work experience at QEII Hospital, where I observed many aspects of the medical and surgical teams in various departments. I learnt a lot about the relationships between patients and medical professionals, and various aspects of medicine, whilst meeting some remarkable patients and inspirational nurses and doctors. This period greatly increased my desire to follow a medical path; however I vastly preferred the more dynamic experience I encountered with the emergency medical personnel, particularly the paramedics.
I am a diligent and dedicated student; I enjoyed studying all of my A level courses immensely and hope to extend this commitment and enjoyment to studying Paramedic Science. I will be pursuing my personal study and am greatly looking forward to my experience at University. I fully accept that this route is a life long commitment, full of daily challenges and accomplishments; I look forward to facing them.
I have since then volunteered on the busy Medical Assessment Unit as a ward assistant, aiding in patients' non-medical care.
I decided to take a gap year, during which I am currently gaining invaluable clinical experience working as a clinical support worker for NHS Professionals. In this role I am responsible for patients' day-to-day care, supporting the nursing team. It is a challenging, yet fulfilling job, in which my team work and interpersonal skills are tested daily.
For about 18 months I worked as a volunteer support worker with special needs children for a charity called Inclusive Play Opportunities Project, which aims to help these children by integrating them into mainstream play schemes with the help of support workers and support groups. I was often required to assist in the care of the children (from personal care, to confidence building, to assisting in procedures such as administration of diazepam during status epilepticus). I also assisted in the organisation of many activities including youth groups, residential trips and play schemes. I found this an incredibly enriching and rewarding experience, whilst learning many fundementals of care. Seeing the children experiencing things they normally wouldn't and integrating with mainstream children was very fulfilling.
I was a member of the Sea Cadet Corps for three years, before leaving to focus on my academic studies. During this time I learnt invaluable skills like discipline, responsibility and the vital importance of team work. I achieved several qualifications in areas as diverse as drill command, engineering and music. I particularly enjoyed participating in survival camping expeditions, which were arduous tests of teamwork and practical skills of problem solving and communication. I achieved a first aid qualification of Royal Naval Level 2; this led to me being appointed first aider at the cadet unit and first aider in the field when on expeditions. I greatly enjoyed the training I received especially in method of resuscitation, administration of emergency drugs and observing emergency procedures such as needle thoracostomy. These three years have imbued me with a strong sense of teamwork, leadership and responsibility; qualities I believe to be essential in a potential paramedic.
This feedback is AI-generated, based on the text of this personal statement:
This personal statement effectively communicates a clear passion for Paramedic Science and illustrates the applicant's relevant work experience and personal qualities such as teamwork and leadership. The detailed examples from volunteering and clinical support roles strengthen the application by demonstrating practical preparation and genuine commitment.
To improve, the applicant could better integrate how their A level studies specifically relate to skills needed in paramedic science, making the link between academic experience and course requirements more explicit. Additionally, expanding on future career aspirations within paramedic science could provide a stronger sense of purpose and motivation.
Overall, the statement is authentic and focused, well suited to the new UCAS personal statement format by emphasizing motivation, preparation, and extracurricular experiences.
The current personal statement format, with three 'scaffolding' questions, was introduced by Ucas in September 2025. This personal statement was submitted before then, using the old essay-style format. It has been carefully edited into the three-question format, with all of the original wording kept.
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