This is a real Politics personal statement written by a student for their university application to York (Politics), Cambridge (Social and Political Sciences), Edinburgh (Geography and Politics), Queens University Belfast (Politics), Bristol (Politics) and Durham University (Social Sciences). It has been carefully edited into the new three-question format, with all of the original wording kept. It may have strengths and weaknesses, but it can be used as inspiration for writing your own UCAS personal statement. Ensure your personal statement is entirely your own work, copying from this example or other sources is considered plagiarism and can affect your application. There are lots more examples in our collection of sample personal statements.
This statement has been reviewed by one of The Student Room's personal statement reviewers, and their feedback is included below.
Reading about history, economics and sociology has opened up the world for me, and strengthened my interest in international development. This interest originates from my experience of growing up in an emerging economy with many third world characteristics. Studying macroeconomics gave me an insight into a new dimension of factors that affect nations, and helped me to further understand how countries impact each other. Reading modern world history gave me insight into how today's governmental structures and ideologies evolved. Fitting these puzzle pieces together has been very exciting to me. I studied A level Biology to further explore practical ways of becoming involved in third world development. I looked at the work of international organisations such as the WHO, and became aware of the need for insight into the local political, sociological and cultural climate before attempting to enforce or apply solutions.
Studying isn’t the only thing in life that excites me. I am a very keen rock climber and hiker, climbing twice a week and often embarking on outdoor adventures. I climbed Mt Kilimanjaro in January this year. I hiked up Ben Nevis and then from Fort William down to Glasgow in August. I enjoy travelling and am privileged enough to consistently do so, having visited 21 different countries in my life. I am planning to travel further during my gap year; at the same time I will be acquiring further work experience. This year I hope to take a part-time access course in A level History. I've loved reading since childhood. I read fantasy, adventure, classics, and non-fiction. I enjoy Jane Austen, "Sophie's World" by Jostein Gaarder and "Gods, Graves and Scholars; The Story of Archaeology" by C.W. Ceram. I have a huge appetite for learning and absorbing more. I read articles from 'Time' magazine, 'The National Geographic' and BBC, and I use the internet to read around my areas of interest. Listening to music is essential to me; I enjoy art and drama. I speak Afrikaans and French. I enjoy critical and analytical writing. I like cooking. I am a passionate Christian, very much involved in my church community.
I soundly enjoyed my academic studies and have often expressed the desire to be an eternal student. I am highly focused, disciplined and enthusiastic. I am well organised. I have also become adaptable, having moved several times both recently and generally. I am logical and analytical. I sincerely believe that I have an extraordinary drive and commitment to bring to my studies.
Overall this statement has a lot of positives, but with some room for improvement. They've got a couple of really interesting points here and with some expansion, this could be an incredibly interesting and unique personal statement. There is enough material here to flesh out a good statement, but there is a need to reduce the time spent on extracurriculars and personality slightly in favour of focusing more on academic interests. It's important to make sure you justify points and connect the content together more clearly.
As an international applicant, it is not critical to give a detailed history of yourself or list your qualifications since these are already on the UCAS form; a brief sentence explaining why you wish to study in the UK might suffice. Avoid overstating qualities without foundation; demonstrate them through examples instead.
The statement's clarity could improve by starting with reasons for choosing the course rather than a personal history. Some sentences use punctuation incorrectly which can confuse meaning.
The academic interests section contains repetition and could benefit from more specific references to readings and personal opinions, especially relating to experiences growing up in South Africa.
The paragraph on extracurricular activities reads as a long list; focusing on fewer activities and emphasizing how these relate to your course choice or personal development would strengthen it. For instance, travel is valuable if linked to insights gained relevant to your studies.
Finally, avoid simply stating personal qualities; instead, illustrate them through your experiences. The examples of rock climbing and church involvement suggest discipline and enthusiasm; adapt your writing to highlight these implicitly.
This feedback is AI-generated, based on the text of this personal statement:
This personal statement demonstrates a clear passion for social and political sciences, particularly international development, grounded in personal experience. The applicant shows maturity and a broad range of interests that indicate a well-rounded character.
To improve for 2026 applications, the statement would benefit from a more focused academic narrative with deeper reflection on specific readings or experiences related to the course. Reducing the length of the extracurricular activities section and linking these experiences directly to skills or perspectives useful for the course would enhance relevance.
The statement currently risks feeling like a list in places; restructuring with clear thematic paragraphs and smoother transitions would improve readability. Personal qualities should be shown through examples rather than stated outright, which aligns with best practice in personal statements today.
Overall, the applicant's unique background and insights provide strong content that, with refinement, can make a compelling and distinctive new UCAS personal statement.
The current personal statement format, with three 'scaffolding' questions, was introduced by Ucas in September 2025. This personal statement was submitted before then, using the old essay-style format. It has been carefully edited into the three-question format, with all of the original wording kept.
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