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Personal Statement:Psychology 9 - The Student Room

This is a real Psychology personal statement written by a student for their university application. It has been carefully edited into the new three-question format, with all of the original wording kept. It may have strengths and weaknesses, but it can be used as inspiration for writing your own UCAS personal statement. Ensure your personal statement is entirely your own work, copying from this example or other sources is considered plagiarism and can affect your application. There are lots more examples in our collection of sample personal statements.

This statement has been reviewed by one of The Student Room's personal statement reviewers, and their feedback is included below.

Why do you want to study this course or subject?

I became interested in applying for a psychology degree after beginning an A-level psychology course. I have enjoyed studying both biopsychology and ethical issues in psychology as modules over the past year. Reading the psychological perspectives of different famous psychologists such as Freud, Szasz, and Pavlov has also greatly interested me. I enjoy observing human behaviour and performing comparisons of theories purported by different psychologists.

I am most looking forward to studying social and individual psychology to link with both my psychology and sociology A-level interests.

How have your qualifications and studies helped you to prepare for this course or subject?

As part of coursework I performed a replication of Piaget's conservation tasks in a primary school. These series of experiments were undertaken by myself and a partner on a group of children aged between four and eight years. The children had to perform the original tasks conducted by Piaget, for example, the conservation of continuous quantity, the conservation of number, the conservation of mass, and the naughty teddy experiments. Recording and correlating the results was fascinating as the results we gained compared well with Piaget's conclusions from the original conservation tasks.

Reading the psychological perspectives of different famous psychologists such as Freud, Szasz and Pavlov has also greatly interested me.

I aim to build upon the knowledge I have begun to learn at college, focusing more specifically on areas such as social and individual psychology.

I have enjoyed studying both biopsychology and ethical issues in psychology, which have helped develop my understanding and interest in the field.

What else have you done to prepare outside of education, and why are these experiences useful?

I enjoy reading and have an interest in literature, regularly attending plays at my local theatre. I recently took a trip to Germany with college, where I had the opportunity to see the Oberammergau passion play and the German opera Zar and Simmerman. On this college trip, we travelled through Austria and the Czech Republic and had the chance to visit Mozart House in Salzburg and explore the old town of Czesky Krumlov.

I have a strong interest in music and listen to a variety of genres ranging from rock to jazz and blues. In the past, I have played in a brass band in my local community and have an interest in other musical instruments, including piano and guitar, for which I have had lessons over the past year.

My interest in horses and my experience of horse riding has led me to secure a part-time weekend job at my local equestrian retail store. Working as a sales assistant has given me a sense of independence, greater self-confidence, and taught me how to handle responsibility.

Additionally, I have gained work experience in both a primary school and a high school as a classroom assistant. These experiences have helped me develop communication skills and understand different age groups, which I believe will be valuable in my psychology studies. Post-degree, I would like to work in the community and have as much contact with a variety of people as possible.

Expert feedback from The Student Room personal statement reviewer

One thing that I notice about this statement is that there are no full stops at the end of paragraphs! It is important to show the admissions tutors that you have a good level of literacy and proofread the work for silly spelling/grammar mistakes. Some of the paragraphs are too short as well - one or two sentences do not equal a paragraph. Extra-curricular activities should be condensed.

It is best to avoid mentioning A Levels in the introduction and say what interests you about psychology in general. Elsewhere, there is not a lot of academic psychology content, which is what two-thirds of the personal statement should be. This can include A Levels, extra reading, and relevant work experience. The last paragraph should also be a conclusion, which this one isn't - it should sum up why you want to study psychology and why you are a good candidate for the course.

Specific comments:

  • "I have enjoyed studying both biopsychology and ethical issues in psychology as modules over the past year." Needs spacing correction.
  • The applicant should mention what it is about them that makes them interesting.
  • Freud is generally not covered (except in a 'history of psychology' or similar module), so it's best not to mention him.
  • The description of Piaget's tasks is too long; admissions tutors will know about them. Instead, discuss what was learned from conducting them.
  • Avoid using overused words like "fascinating".
  • Some sentences are vague or don't add much; examples to illustrate points would improve the statement.
  • One sentence paragraphs (like stating the interest in social and individual psychology) should be expanded with reasons why.
  • Extra-curricular information (plays, trips, music, jobs) could be condensed to fit better.
  • The conclusion and career aspirations are vague and could better relate to psychology.

AI generated feedback

This feedback is AI-generated, based on the text of this personal statement:

This personal statement shows a clear interest and foundational knowledge in psychology, particularly through coursework experience and an enthusiasm for different psychological perspectives. The personal anecdotes about Piaget's conservation tasks and music and horse-riding experiences add valuable individuality and demonstrate responsibility and independence.

However, the statement would benefit from more detailed academic focus: linking coursework more directly to psychology concepts and explaining what has been learned from practical work. Expanding on why specific psychology topics are appealing and how they connect to future career aims would strengthen the motivational aspect.

Structurally, the flow can be improved by combining short paragraphs into coherent ideas and ensuring full sentences and punctuation correctness to reflect good literacy. Condensing extra-curricular activities is advisable to make room for more focused psychology content.

For the new Ucas personal statement format, explicitly addressing each of the three sections helps admissions tutors clearly see motivation, preparation, and broader experiences. Adding a concise conclusion summarizing why this applicant is a strong candidate would enhance the overall impact.

How personal statements have changed?

The current personal statement format, with three 'scaffolding' questions, was introduced by Ucas in September 2025. This personal statement was submitted before then, using the old essay-style format. It has been carefully edited into the three-question format, with all of the original wording kept.

Need help with your personal statement? You can ask a question or get feedback from The Student Room community (and our trained personal statement experts) on the personal statement advice forum.

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